A Guide to Torturing Your Characters

by | 23 March 2018 | Writing | 16 comments

Out of all the characters you’ve ever written, how many of them have a happy story the whole way through? What about your favourite books? Do the characters in them have happy, fun-times all their lives?

I can certainly say a big “no” to that question. I’m not very nice to my characters, and the books I like best are the books where everything isn’t perfect for the characters. While it sounds horrible to say it, it’s true. I call it fun to read those books where terrible sad things happen and the characters go through tough struggles.

Because, when you think about it, if the character waltzed through and completed the story goal without having any trouble or struggles…that would be an incredibly boring book.

However, when torturing your own characters, there are several guidelines that writers should follow. It’s not just tossing pain around willy-nilly.


Only do it if you have to

Don’t torture your characters unless it furthers the thematic goal and preferably the plot as well. You can’t just throw in a torture scene or a shooting or anything like that just as a story starter, or a feels dump. It has to be there for a reason—to impact the characters so they make a hard decision or to force them to push themselves as they continue on despite the pain.

If you just injure your character for a bit of action or to try trigger some tears from the reader, it’s not going to work. It’ll end up forced and the reader will feel cheated that they didn’t get to experience the deep emotions that should come with a scene like that.

Luckily, in most Speculative Fiction/YA action, pain is often a necessary element. As I said at the beginning, you can’t just have a story without having some struggles or pain because it’d turn out terribly boring.

Good news never made a paper sell.


Leave off the graphic details

Whether it’s a battle scene, or a single bullet wound, no one wants to know the details of the blood and guts. It’s gruesome and untasteful and it’s not going to further your plot. Sure, you can’t just go all airy-fairy and ignore it. Pain is messy, and you should write it realistically.

Instead of focusing on all the ew-y details, it’s far more powerful to focus on the character. How the character feels. Their emotions. Their body language. Their thoughts. That will draw the reader in much more than describing all the blood and the gross graphic-ness.


Mental torture is more important than physical

It’s all very well if you torture them physically, but it’s not going to draw your readers in and make them suffer with your character and get all the feelsy feels.

Give them dilemmas. Make the character fight inside himself to work out what is right and what is wrong. Give him tough decisions where both lead to horrible ends, but only one is ultimately right.

You can mentally torture the friend/fellow main character/mentor/ally of someone who is being physically tortured. Pound out that guilt. Make them see what their friend is going through and make it their fault. Don’t just make them think “This is my fault” because if it isn’t actually they can still believe that in a tiny part of their brain. But if it actually is their fault…then that can tear them apart from the inside.

And that = feels for the writer and the reader.


Guilt. Responsibility. Failure. Betrayal. Doubt. Use them. Make the character battle inside himself as much as—if not more than–on the outside.


Give them a life still

Sometimes a writer can get so caught up in giving every character a depressing backstory of agony and pain, that they ignore the fact that CHARACTERS ARE PEOPLE. GIVE THE PRECIOUS DARLINGS A LIFE.

Or don’t. If you’re one of those sorts of people. xD

But honestly. Don’t just randomly toss in horrible backstories because that’s what everyone does. You can have people with happy families, bright pasts. In fact, I think that some of the most powerful characters I’ve read and written are those innocent characters who learn how harsh the world is, but they still keep on smiling anyway. They keep on being the light they started as. They end up wiser and stronger, but still happy and hopeful.


Focus on the character, not the suffering

Being mean to characters is hard, even though it’s necessary.

It’s not fun. It’s not like we take pleasure in it, as such. But we know that humans are messed up, and this world is messed up, and as writers we should portray that realistically too.

But it doesn’t end there.

As Christian writers, we shouldn’t just portray the messed up world. We have a calling to show that the mess isn’t the end. There’s still hope. There’s always hope.

We shouldn’t focus on the pain and torture we’re putting our characters through. We should focus on how the character keeps on going even through that. We should show our readers that we believe in an undying hope that doesn’t change depending on physical circumstances.


Torturing your characters happens a lot—and it should happen quite a bit, in varying ways—but we should always make sure that it’s the absolute best we can do for the story. There’s no use in trying to toss in a tear jerker just for the sake of it. That’s cheating on your readers. If you want them to cry, they have to have something to cry about.


Have you ever made yourself cry by being mean to your characters? What’s the meanest thing you’ve done? Have your characters ever surprised you by how determined and strong they are? Hang out with me in the comments!

Jane Maree

Jane Maree

Jane Maree is an Australian writer, adventurer at heart, beloved daughter of the King of Kings, and believer in at least six impossible things before breakfast. Raised on fairy tales, scraped knees, and makeshift swords, she has yet to outgrow any of them. In her day job, Jane teaches music and freelances as an editor, but by night she crafts daring stories of broken heroes overcoming extraordinary odds.


  1. Sarah

    *throws the confetti* I’ve waited for this guide my whole life. 😀

    Annd yeah I did accidentally make myself cry with Brinley once…. Wasn’t fun 😛

    • Jane Maree

      Haha yay! I hope this was just what you needed. 😉

      *hugs* It’s okaaay, she gets a happy ending. (I think…she does, doesn’t she? She’d better.)

      • Sarah

        (Oh yes… I hope so! If not a completely happy one, it’ll definitely end on something hopeful. ^-^ )

        • Jane Maree

          Phew, good. 😛

  2. J.A.Penrose

    *sniffles* So much sadness. Torturing a character tortures the reader and the writer as well.
    I have tortured characters. And I have been tortured by feels. And I have come pretty close to crying over Ashley lately. So feelsey. And I don’t know how I can be so mean. I feel horrible. And she stays happy. *sobs*
    I loved this post so much Jane! And yes, it is so important to not just toss stuff in for feels. It’s painful to read things like that because they just fall flat.

    • Jane Maree

      *pats* Yess, very sad. *sniffs* It definitely does.
      Aw yes. Such sad characters with their sad stories. But I love those characters! Those ones that stay so happy and hopeful despite it all.
      Thanks! I’m glad you liked it. 😀 Absolutely agreed.

  3. Hannah Gaudette

    Eeepp! Every writer needs this post! Seriously, thank you.

    • Jane Maree

      Awh thank you! That’s too sweet of you. 🙂

  4. Audrey Caylin

    Yesss this is so good! Especially the point about still giving them a life…I have a bad habit of making every major character have a terrible backstory, which can come off as very unrealistic 😛

    Meanest thing I’ve done to a character? Given her a prophecy that says she’ll save her people but her family will die unless she ‘opens the gates.’
    And no one knows what ‘the gates’ are because prophecies are so vague XD

    • Jane Maree

      Stop being so mean, Audrey. XD Be nice to SOME of your characters. 😛

      Oh no. D: “but WHAT GATES” ahh man that would be bad.

  5. Jenna

    *sigh* it’s so hard to give pain to my precious characters. but it’s oh so necessary.
    thanks for the great tips Jane! 😉

    • Jane Maree

      Saaame. They’re so precious and innocent. *wraps them in blankets*
      Thanks for reading, and I’m glad you enjoyed it! 🙂

  6. Sam Kowal

    I did once feel bad for being mean to my characters. Once. I’m better now, though. It’s not contagious

    • Jane Maree

      *gasp* Whaat?? No way. XD
      Phew, I’m glad you’re better now. I was worried for a moment there. 😉

  7. Jem Jones

    I’ve never physically tortured/significantly hurt a character… and as a consequence I sometimes wonder if I’m too soft to be a writer?? ;P (But I prefer to give them emotional pain, and I’m assuming that’s sufficient!)

    (I’ve never made myself cry, though – not even in that short story where everyone was pleading and sad and got killed.)

    And you make a good point – yes, sometimes stories need horrible things to happen, but they also need hope! 😀

    • Jane Maree

      Emotional pain is definitely a good one. I’m sure that’d be just fine. 😛 I’ve only once actually literally had a character tortured. And that was traumatic. *cries*

      You hard-hearted soul. XD

      Absolutely. The hardship makes the hope shine out all the brighter.

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